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Puppet

The hooks cut into his flesh
Suspending him among the bodies of so many others
White flashes of flame that consume his weak wooden body
He is nothing without those hands guiding him
He is nothing at all

Within the factory there are a million like him
They are all so different, yet all yearning for the same purpose
After all, a puppet longs to fit in with the crowd

So the hands of the mighty guide this little puppet
He is different than the rest, yet just the same
A matyr or a saviour, is that what he is?
No, just a puppet controlled by the hands of a higher power

At the end of the day, the factory stops working
Leaving the little wooden faces to sleep
The higher power stops and admires his creations today
He shuts the door behind him and returns to his own little world
That of a God and that of a human
©2003-2008 ~Raphel
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~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 3, 2003, 10:21:33 AM
Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it.
~KachinaPrisma:iconKachinaPrisma: Sep 3, 2003, 4:36:33 PM
Beautiful poem. Kind of reminds me of a disney movie I once saw when I was little. But this is probably way beyond disney creation. Disney is childish, this isn't. I really enjoy your work, I hope to see more soon.
~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 3, 2003, 4:42:44 PM
Thank you for the nice comment. What Disney movie does it remind you of? I am just curious.
~thenotquitesane1:iconthenotquitesane1: Sep 3, 2003, 4:57:32 PM
Like deviant69beauty said, very nice concept :) Very descriptive, helps form a scene in your head... n.n :clap:

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Tell me am i right to think that there could be nothing better,
Than making you my bride and slowly growing old together.
~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 3, 2003, 5:26:54 PM
Thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
~KachinaPrisma:iconKachinaPrisma: Sep 3, 2003, 5:44:25 PM
Pinoccio. I'm not sure if I spelled that right, but you get what I'm saying, right? You know, with the little puppet that comes to life and becomes a real boy in the end?
~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 3, 2003, 5:46:08 PM
I have seen that one before. It is kind of interesting how you say that my poem is like that because in my poem, I am relating how people are like puppets. In Pinnochio, the puppet is wanting to be like a person. I guess what I am saying is that there is little difference between people and puppets. But not all people. No, definately not you.
~tragicrabbit:icontragicrabbit: Sep 4, 2003, 1:09:27 PM
it's a great idea, although i have to say i don't believe God shuts the door on us.. but that's just my opinion, to each his own :) your words are very descriptive and paint a vivid picture in the reader's mind. and although the puppet concept is widely used, this one stands out from the rest because of it's powerful words & ideas. nice job :)

- brittany