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Romance in C Minor by ~Raphel:iconRaphel:



The fingers move up and down
Upon the ivory and ebony keyboard
Lovely music flows throughout the empty house
The notes are like fingers enticing the mind
Drawing tourists to the door
But what do they see?
They see nothing...

The lady's eyes are closed in a peaceful expression
Dreaming, dreaming of her long lost love
While playing upon the old piano
Although all the keys are out of tune
The music still remains fresh and young
Like a dew-enfolded flower upon a field
Drawing tourists to the door
But what do they see?
They see nothing...

The young man can almost remember a tune
Deep asleep in his grave
Although love is lost,
The tune is not
And forever shall the lady play upon her broken piano in the broken house
Drawing tourists to the door
But what do they see?
They see nothing...
©2003-2008 ~Raphel
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This is my poem. I would appreciate it if you commented on it.
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~deviant69beauty:icondeviant69beauty: Sep 1, 2003, 5:52:20 PM
Lovely. It leaves you questioning... very nice. (^__^)
~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 1, 2003, 6:26:00 PM
Thank you very much.
~tragicrabbit:icontragicrabbit: Sep 4, 2003, 1:06:01 PM
i completely agree, it does leave you thinking.. and i play piano, so this hits me in a particularly unique way :) plus, all the keys on my piano are out of tune. x__x;; but anyway.. i think my favorite part was "the notes are like fingers enticing the mind," which i thought was a strikingly clear and beautiful image. you have a unique style. i like it :)

- brittany
~Raphel:iconRaphel: Sep 4, 2003, 3:44:07 PM
Thank you very much. I appreciate the nice comment.
~nxoxtxhxixnxg:iconnxoxtxhxixnxg: Sep 8, 2003, 3:44:18 PM
beautiful. the picture in my mind is so vivid i can almost hear the old piano. yeah piano is my real talent and passion, so i can really connect with the way you wrote this poem. excellent.

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~nxoxtxhxixnxg:iconnxoxtxhxixnxg: Sep 8, 2003, 3:49:58 PM
i was thinking, and this needs to be favorited. :D

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"we can't stop here...this is bat country!"